Many governmants think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people ,however are equally important for a country Discuss both views and give your own opininion.

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are equally vital for a country On the one
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economic efficiency is an integral part of
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try to increase budgetary regulation. Some countries where there
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of living , education and several comfort services have budgetary
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another perspective monetary
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is the best way to normal life ,but
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, we must understand its disadvantages. They included cultural heritage eroding,air pollution, environmental
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economic progress is not
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are important too.
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steady life of country and education integral part of modern life , so governments should control other ways of growing . People's statement that personal development is as important as a country's wealth is true ,because ,
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Task Response
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Grammar
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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