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The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Those two pie charts depict information about the marriage
status
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 of the citizen in
Canada
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 and in
Australia
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.
To begin
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 with, it is shown that both countries had similar percentages for their highest rank of marital
status
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, which is separated but not divorced with 53 per cent in
Canada
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 and 41 per cent in
Australia
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.
Similarly
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, the second lead for those two states
were
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also
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 the same,
fell
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 into married people accounting for 29% (
Canada
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) and 46% (
Australia
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).
In addition
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, there is another similar
number of
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percentage for
divorced
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divorce
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 in
Australia
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 and
Canada
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, approximately 2% and 1%.
Whereas
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for
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widowed and never married had a similar number in
Canada
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, just only 7 per cent both, whilst in
Australia
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 just over 6% and 5%.
However
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, there is a marital
status
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 that
Australia
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 doesn't have,
thus
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 only belongs in
Canada
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, which is
the
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same-sex marriage. Even though not the highest nor the lowest, that
status
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 has a percentage of 3
percent
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per cent
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 in
Canada
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words status, canada, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • marital status
  • population
  • pie charts
  • percentage
  • categories
  • Married
  • Single
  • Divorced
  • Widowed
  • distribution
  • noticeable trends
  • comparison
  • significantly different
  • similarities
  • striking differences
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