The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

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The graph illustrates the average monthly fluctuation in the prices of copper,

nickel

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, and zinc

metals

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in 2014.

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Nickel

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began with the highest percentage of income but ended with the lowest.

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, zinc started with the smallest change and ended with the highest, and copper prices

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fluctuated during 2014. Prices for all three different

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dipped in June. Taking a closer look at the first month, January, the price of

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was at the top of the graph;

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, as the months went by, in June it dropped.

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, when we look at the other

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, they were

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the same as

nickel

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; they both fell in the same month. During July, they were both stable until October. In October,

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and zinc rose again until November. Despite a slight increase in copper from November to December.

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, all

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fluctuated over the 12 months. Even though the changes in the graph were negatively rising and falling until October or November, the

metals

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began to rise.

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Overall Band Score

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Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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4 paragraphs

170 words

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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

You have heard that a developer plans to build a shopping center near your home.Write a letter to the counsil.

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree of disagree with this statement?

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