Your are stayig at your friend’s house who is travelling to another country. A recent strom damaged the house. Write a letter to your friend and say What happened and when What was damaged in the house What needs to be done about it

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Dear Bennet I want to inform you about an accident which happened
with
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your
house
,
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when you
was
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in
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journey
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a journey
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. The Inadzuma storm damaged your
house
by
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large thunder. I couldn't really do anything
while
it happening.
On the other hand
, now we can fix and upgrade your
house
. For the most part, the roof
damaged
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more than other parts of
house
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the house
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. Now it
have
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a lot of holes.
Then
your fence fell to the ground
due to
thunder. But the saddest thing is your mailbox disappeared. I really tried to find it, but I couldn't.
Overall
, we can fix your
house
, if you return from the journey a bit faster. Fortunately, Nahida can help us, because she is in our village. We can
easely
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easily
repair your
house
, raise the fence and
then
find your
favorite
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mailbox somewhere. And if you want, we can upgrade your
house
to another level. With love your friend Eula.
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coherence cohesion
To improve your score, you should ensure that your letter follows a clear and logical structure. Start with a proper introduction, follow with detailed paragraphs each focusing on a single aspect of the situation, and conclude with a summary or a call to action.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing could be more appropriate for the situation and your relationship with the recipient. Consider using expressions that accurately reflect your concern and the nature of the news you are delivering.
task achievement
While your response covers the topic, providing more specific details about each aspect of the damage and how it affected the house would enrich your letter. Additionally, suggesting a clear plan or steps for repair and recovery can enhance your task achievement score.
task achievement
Adopting a suitable tone is crucial in letter writing. Even though the situation is unfortunate, an empathetic and supportive tone can convey your concern and willingness to help more effectively.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • severe weather conditions
  • structural integrity
  • mitigate
  • immediate steps
  • insurance claim
  • repair estimates
  • temporary fixes
  • contractors
  • coordination
  • overseeing repairs
  • valuables
  • reassurance
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