IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

The map below shows the development of the village of Reymouth between 1995 and present.

The map below shows the development of the village of Reymouth between 1995 and present.
#development #village #reymouth
The map
illustrate
Change the verb form
illustrates
show examples
 the improvement of the village of Reymounth from 1995 to the
recent
Correct your spelling
present
show examples
 day.
Overall
, it can be seen that the majority
Change preposition
of developement
show examples
developement
Correct your spelling
development
 was
change
Fix the infinitive
to change
show examples
 farmland and forest
park
Fix the agreement mistake
parks
show examples
 to
sport
Change the noun form
sports
show examples
 facilities
such
 as golf and tennis. In 1995, located in
east
Add an article
the east
show examples
 was the farmland and forest park.
Moreover
 in the south was
fish
Correct article usage
a fish
show examples
 market and fishing port
along with
 the sea. Near
be
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
it was
cafe
Add an article
a cafe
the cafe
show examples
.
Also
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
 the main street roads was
shop
Add an article
a shop
show examples
 across fish market and
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
 the junction of
road
Add an article
the road
show examples
 was
hotel
Add an article
a hotel
the hotel
show examples
. To the north of the maps depict a number of housing. From the enhancement of the village it noticeable that increased number of housing in the north. To the east that
change
 from farmland and forest park to the sport communities.
For instance
 golf and tennis.
Furthermore
, in the south fish market
change
Replace the word
changed
show examples
 to apartments and
shop
Fix the agreement mistake
shops
show examples
change
Wrong verb form
changed
show examples
 to
restuarants
Correct your spelling
restaurants
.
In
addition
Add a comma
addition,
show examples
 fishing port was
delete
Wrong verb form
deleted
show examples
.
Submitted by kungslowjam on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words change with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: