Some people think that government funding should not be used for supporting Art & culture, while others think that supporting cultural activities may be beneficial for the population and the culture. Discuss both views and give your own openion.

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their talent is
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art
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because it
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solely
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people
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countries
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vast and respectful
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are more independent there.Regardless
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fact, it cannot
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basic facilities of
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more important. On the
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cannot be denied that
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of
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in countries is much more essential,
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of
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of underwater disposal.
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efforts ultimately
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to
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ecosystem. Apart from that, there
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a need to spend money on
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of good
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helps to generate more employment opportunities. Developed nations
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to invest more in the
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which increases the flow of money in the market and
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lifestyle
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nation. In conclusion,
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on basic
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system
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and
infrastructure
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are
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more worthy than promoting
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and
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culture
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activities in the
country
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