Some people think that government funding should not be used for supporting Art & culture, while others think that supporting cultural activities may be beneficial for the population and the culture. Discuss both views and give your own openion.
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expeditures
is to promote Correct your spelling
expenditures
art
and culture
, however
, along with
remaining people
I also
believe it can be spend
to build good Change the verb form
be spent
sewage
system
and infrastructure
in the country
.
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a plateform
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to artistic groups and Correct your spelling
platform
showcase
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showcasing
commendable
effort of Add an article
the commendable
a commendable
government
. It has Add an article
the government
positive
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a positive
lead
to Change the verb form
leads
encourage
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encouraging
people
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are interested
art
and culture
,in this
way
they can Add a comma
way,
seprate themselve
from Correct your spelling
separate themselves
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race of job seeking community. Correct article usage
the rat
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in, art
art
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the art
feild
does not Correct your spelling
field
required
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require
qualification
because it Fix the agreement mistake
qualifications
wholly
and Add a missing verb
is wholly
souly
based on inner interest and talent which makes Correct your spelling
solely
the
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apply
people
independent in fast
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a fast
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, in west
countries Replace the word
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art
and culture
has
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have
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spaces
therefore
people
are more independent there.Regardless the
fact, it cannot Change preposition
of the
be deny
basic facilities of Change the verb form
be denied
sewage
and infrastructure
is
more important.
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are
otherhand
, Correct your spelling
other hand
fact
cannot be denied that Add an article
the fact
a fact
development
of Correct article usage
the development
sewage
system
in countries is much more essential,Fix the agreement mistake
systems
otherwise
, the stagnant water leads to more health issues which can only be solved by construction
of Add an article
the construction
good
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a good
the good
system
of underwater disposal. Such
efforts ultimately leads
to Change the verb form
lead
good
ecosystem. Apart from that, there Correct article usage
a good
also
a need to spend money on Add a missing verb
is also
development
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the development
infrastructure
in the country
, it
helps to generate more employment opportunities. Developed nations Correct pronoun usage
which
also
gets
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get
attract
to invest more in the Wrong verb form
attracted
country
which increases the flow of money in the market and finally
, leads to good
lifestyle Add an article
a good
of
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for
public
nation.
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the public
spendings
on basic Fix the agreement mistake
spending
sewage
system
and Fix the agreement mistake
systems
infrastructure
are
more worthy than promoting Correct subject-verb agreement
is
art
and culture
activities in the Replace the word
cultural
country
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