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The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given line graph gives information about the
cost
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 of
bananas
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 in four countries from 1994 to 2004.
Overall
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, the
cost
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 of
bananas
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 in
Japan
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 was the highest during the period.
In contrast
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, the
cost
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 of
bananas
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 in the USA was the lowest. Regarding
Japan
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, the
cost
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 of
bananas
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 in
Japan
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 stood
nearly
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at nearly
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 2.0$ in 1994, which was the highest
figure
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 presented in the chart. and later
this
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figure
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 fluctuated wildly between nearly 2.0$ and just over 2.75$ from 1994 to 1996. The
cost
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 of
bananas
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 in
Japan
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 witnessed a mid
fluctuation
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 between just under 2.0$ and 2.25$ over the next 4
years
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, before
this
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 record a wide
fluctuation
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 between about 1.5$ and just over 2.0$ for the following 2
years
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.Discussing the USA, the
cost
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 of
bananas
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 increased slightly from 0.75$ to 1.25$ in 1995, after which
this
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figure
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 remained stable from 1995 to 1996. The
figure
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 for the USA saw a slight
fluctuation
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 between 1.00$ and 1.25$ over the next 3
years
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 before a slight downtrend to about 1$
at the end
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 of the period was recorded. With regard to France, the
cost
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 of
bananas
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 levelled off at about 1.5$ between 1994 and 1997, before
this
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 fluctuated between 1$ and 1.75$ over the next 7
years
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. Looking at Germany, the
cost
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 of
bananas
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 saw a
fluctuation
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 between 1.25$ and 1.5$ from 1994 to 1996, before
this
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 remained unchanged over the next year. The
figure
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 for Germany fluctuated between 1.25 and 1.5.
At the end
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 of the period,
this
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figure
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 remained constant at 1.25$

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cost, bananas, japan, figure, fluctuation, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • stability
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • significant
  • comparison
  • variation
  • consistently
  • peak
  • trough
  • average
  • period
  • respectively
  • domestic market
  • external factors
  • plummet
  • surge
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