The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began.
The chart and graph illustrate the competitors who participated in the Olympics from 1924 to 2012.
Overall
, it is clear that
the number
of people has considerably increased during the period. In addition
, Men and Women
are willing to participate in the Olympics, so the quantity increases every year, while
the number
of men is higher than women
.
To begin
with, 3000 males enjoyed the games but there were only 100 females. After 26 years, the number
of males rose by 1500 from 3000 to 4500, whereas
females only had 500. In 1984, the number
of women
already increased to over 1000, so the total was also
beyond 6000.
However
, there was a sharp increase in the group of women
at the end
of the period, so it reached a peak at 5000. It was only less than 1000 numbers with men and the total numbers also
reached over 10000, which was the highest.Submitted by af231186 on
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