The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began.

The chart and graph illustrate the competitors who participated in the Olympics from 1924 to 2012.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the
number
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of people has considerably increased during the period.
In addition
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, Men and
Women
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are willing to participate in the Olympics, so the quantity increases every year,
while
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the
number
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of men is higher than
women
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.
To begin
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with, 3000 males enjoyed the games but there were only 100 females. After 26 years, the
number
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of males rose by 1500 from 3000 to 4500,
whereas
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females only had 500. In 1984, the
number
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of
women
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already increased to over 1000, so the total was
also
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beyond 6000.
However
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, there was a sharp increase in the group of
women
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at the end
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of the period, so it reached a peak at 5000. It was only less than 1000 numbers with men and the total numbers
also
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reached over 10000, which was the highest.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Olympic Games
  • participants
  • historical context
  • trend
  • exponential growth
  • influence
  • world events
  • diversity
  • technological advancements
  • global
  • gender equality
  • International Olympic Committee (IOC)
  • unity
  • competition
  • athletes
  • entry
  • represent
  • delegation
  • boycotts
  • milestones
  • parity
  • inclusive
  • disciplines
  • legacy
  • sponsorship
  • admission
  • elite sportspeople
  • national pride
  • cultural exchange
  • ambassadors
  • sportsmanship
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