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Many cities around the world are now testing driverless cars on the same roads that are used by regular cars. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

In my opinion, having driverless
vehicles
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 would certainly lead to fewer
accidents
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, but there would
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 be considerable drawbacks
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 as substantial job losses. The primary benefit of self-driving cars is a reduction in the number of
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. I have heard that a large percentage of
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 could have been avoided because
drivers
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 were not paying attention or made poor decisions.
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, I sometimes see
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 applying makeup, looking at a map, or talking on a cell phone. With only part of their attention on the road, they might not see a hazard.
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, a driverless car is always alert, using hundreds of sensors to scan for dangers.
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, an automated car is safer because it can detect and avoid situations that lead to
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 better than a distracted driver can. There is,
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, a potential disadvantage in that many individuals would be put out of work if
vehicles
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 could operate without
drivers
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. Today
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 of thousands of people are employed in the transportation industry
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, driving
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 buses, taxis, and other
vehicles
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. Their work would become obsolete if artificial intelligence replaced them. Of course, some people would be employed in maintaining these cars, but there are already mechanics who service traditional
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. The net change could be fewer jobs.
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, society may suffer serious economic problems if a large segment of workers were rendered unemployed. In sum,
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 driverless cars would increase road safety, they would
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 cause significant social and economic changes as many
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 lost their positions.

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structure
Make a clear plan before you write. Say your view in one line at the start and stay with this idea.
structure
Link each idea to the task. Show how driverless cars on real roads can change safety and jobs.
content
Add more facts or numbers to show what you claim, such as safety drops or jobs lost.
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Give a strong example for each point and make sure it fits the task.
language
Use short, simple sentences. Use easy words to make your points clear.
development
Clear view on both sides of the issue.
content
Good use of examples about safety and work.
coherence
The essay has a clear start, middle, and end.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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