The charts below show information about consumer decision regarding mobile phone purchases in two different countries.
The given bar charts reveal statistics about the factors which are used by consumers when they purchase a mobile phone in two various countries.
Overall
, at first glance
it is evident that both countries are responsible for almost the same indicator of friends' recommendations.
With regard to Add a comma
glance,
Country
A, it is observed that half of people prefer to looking
at the price Wrong verb form
look
while
buying a phone. Friends’ recommendations are the second most popular factor with the
rate of 33%. Correct article usage
a
Furthermore
, brand and design, preferred by a minority of purchasers, form only 7% and 10% respectively in this
Country
.
In terms of Country
B, it can be seen that two-fifth
of buyers care about design and stand first. Fix the agreement mistake
two-fifths
In contrast
, the percentage of people who consider price vital ranked least
Correct word choice
lowest
with
9%. The factor of brand is approximately twice less than that of design, Change preposition
at
by
making up 19% contribution.Change preposition
apply
Finally
, turning to the percentage of Friend’s recommendations, it follows the
similar pattern with Correct article usage
a
Country
A and is accountable for 32%.Submitted by writingbhos on
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