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The graph illustrates levels of national debt in four European countries from 2005 to 2020

The graph illustrates levels of national debt in four European countries from 2005 to 2020
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The graph illustrates the proportion of the national
debt
 of 4 different countries which come from Europe between 2005 to 2020.
Overall
, the national
debt
almost
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countries
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all countries
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 had
gradual
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 increase throughout the period,
while
Denmark
 experienced a downward trend.
Additionally
, the UK had the most
debt
 over 15 years,
whereas
Denmark
 had the opposite situation. Regarding the 3 countries which showed
rise
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 from 2005 to 2020.
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In terms
 of the UK and Germany's national
debt
, they started at exactly 75% and 65% in the first year, respectively.
Besides
, the
debt
 of
Denmark
 followed the UK's
debt
 and the distance between them
still
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 at 10% until 2020. Meanwhile, the national
debt
 of
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France fluctuated at around 70% in the first 10 years
with
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exceeding Germany at about 72% by 2012, after which it altered to rise to more than 80%
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in
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 the end of
year
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. Turning to
Denmark
 where it saw a deep decline in national
debt
.
Denmark
 is a country that reached a peak of 58% in 2020, before decreasing to about 40% by 2015
then
 it
levelled-off
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.
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