The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began.

The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began.
The presented chart and graph illustrate the
number
of individuals both sexes, who took part in the
Olympics
between 1924 and 2012.
Overall
, it can be seen that the
number
of participants rose dramatically over the given time frame.
Additionally
,
men
took part in the
Olympics
more than women in all mentioned years. In detail, around 3 thousand people entered the
Olympics
which
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most of them were
men
,
while
in
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almost 50 years later, about 45000 males participated in
this
event and only 5 hundred of them were females. What can be concluded from the charts is that, in 1984, compared to 1952
number
of participants went up to more than 6000 which 5000 of them were
men
.
Furthermore
, by 2012, the
Olympics
constituted the highest
number
of participants with females accounting for around 5000, which was the peak of all
in
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almost a century ago,
while
about 6000 of them were
men
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, olympics, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Olympic Games
  • participants
  • historical context
  • trend
  • exponential growth
  • influence
  • world events
  • diversity
  • technological advancements
  • global
  • gender equality
  • International Olympic Committee (IOC)
  • unity
  • competition
  • athletes
  • entry
  • represent
  • delegation
  • boycotts
  • milestones
  • parity
  • inclusive
  • disciplines
  • legacy
  • sponsorship
  • admission
  • elite sportspeople
  • national pride
  • cultural exchange
  • ambassadors
  • sportsmanship
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