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The diagrams show how house designs differ according to climate

The diagrams show how house designs differ according to climate
The diagrams show how
house
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 designs differ
according to
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climate
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. The most noticeable difference between houses designed for cool and warm
climates
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 is in the shape of the
roof
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. The designs
also
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 differ with regard to the
windows
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 and the use of insulation. We can see that the cool
climate
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house
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 has a high-angled
roof
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, which allows sunlight to enter through the window.
By contrast
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, the
roof
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 of the warm
climate
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house
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 has a peak in the middle and
roof
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 overhangs to shade the
windows
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. Insulation and thermal building materials are used in cool
climates
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 to reduce heat loss,
whereas
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 insulation and reflective materials are used to keep the heat out in warm
climates
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.
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, the cool
climate
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house
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 has one window which faces the direction of the sun,
while
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 the warm
climate
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house
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 has
windows
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 on two sides which are shaded from the sun. By opening the two
windows
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 at night, the
house
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 designed for warm
climates
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 can be ventilated. \

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words house, climate, climates, roof, windows with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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