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The graph below shows the sales of children's books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the sales of children's books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The given line graph compares the amount of
the
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sales
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books
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 in different categories during a four-year period since 2002 in one country.
It is clear that
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 people bought
less
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 educational
books
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, children’s
books
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 had the largest amount of
sales
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 in the corresponding period.
It is clear that
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 children’s
book
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books
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 experienced a sharp increase from just above 3
million
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dollars
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 in 2002 to well above 50
million
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dollars
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 in 2006.
On the other hand
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, adult fiction and educational
books
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 had a vice versa trend from 2002 to 2006. Adult fiction experienced a moderate decrease in
sales
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 from approximately 45
million
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dollars
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 in 2002 to just under 40
million
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dollars
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 in 2003.
However
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, educational
books
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 grew in
sales
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 from roughly 25
million
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dollars
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 in 2002 to just above 30
million
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dollars
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 in 2003. After some fluctuations, these two categories reached together and educational
books
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 overtook adult fiction eventually in 2006 at just above 30
million
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dollars
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "it is clear that".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, books, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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