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The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 the amount of
books
 read by
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 at Burnaby
public library
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Public Library
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 between 2011 and 2014.
Overall
, it can be seen that
number
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the number
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 of
male
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males
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 reading
books
 higher than
female
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females
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.
Furthermore
,
number
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a number
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 of men
read
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reading
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book
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books
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 are
countinuous
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continuously
growth
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. But female
are
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fluctuated. From
starting
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the starting
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year
number
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the number
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 of
female
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females
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higher
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is higher
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 than
male
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males
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.
However
,
in
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the final
year
 of information
depict
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 the
different
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difference
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 between
male
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a male
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 reading book and
female
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a female
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.
To begin
 with, the
number
 of men reading
books
 in 2011 was 2500. By
following
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year
 slightly increased to 4000.
Moreover
, in 2013 has significantly grew to 10,000 and
to
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the
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peaked at 14,000 in 2014.
On the other hand
, the
number
 of female reading
books
 started from 5500 in 2011. In the next
year
 moderately rose to 8000.
Although
 to the peaked at 10000 in 2013. But in the next
year
 reduced to 7000 in 2014.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, number, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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