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the graph below illustrates internet users as percentage of population in the countries usa, canada and mexico between 1999 to 2009.

the graph below illustrates internet users as percentage of population in the countries usa, canada and mexico between 1999 to 2009.
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the provided line graph gives information about
the
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web
 surfers in three different countries, namely
USA
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the USA
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,
Canada
 and Mexico, over a
period
 of 10 years from 1999 to 2009. looking from an
overall
 perspective, it can be clearly seen from the graph that
Canada
 had the highest percentage of internet consumers,
while
 Mexico had the lowest one by the end of
given
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period
. for more
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, in 1999 the percentage of
American
 online
user
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users
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 who could access the world wide
web
, which stood at 25% was twice as much as that of
canada
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Canada
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, making it the country with the highest
web
 coverage. the proportion of
the
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web
 surfers in
American
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 plummeted to 70% from 1990 to 2005
then
 moderately rose to 80% in 2009. there was a gradual increase from 10% up to 30% over 24 months in
canada
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. strikingly, the ratio of people accessing the net in
Canada
 rose remarkably
then
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 surpassed
American
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America
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 in 2002 to become the country have the fastest growth.
this
 speed
remaind
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remained
remains
 and reached 200%
at the end
 of
observed
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period
. in year of 1999, only 5% of Mexico's population could access the internet,
this
 is equivalent to
one fifth
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 of the
American
 interweb cover rate and half of the Canadian cyberspace. after one decade the rate slightly increased to 35%.
however
,
Maxico
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Mexico
 remained with the lowest number of network
user
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users
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 over the
period
 of the survey.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words web, canada, period, american with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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