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Modern communications mean that it’s no longer necessary to write letters. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Exchanging
communications
 is very crucial in the present society. With the ever growing technology, people are using latest and fastest means of
communications
 rather than writing letters. In my opinion, I agree with
this
 situation to my fullest. In
this
 essay, I will discuss how newer communication methods are efficient when compared to writing letters.
Firstly
,
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modern technology made
communications
 very fast. With the latest applications like
whatsapp
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WhatsApp
,
instagram
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,
snapchat
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, and
twitter
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, we can communicate with anyone in seconds, making it the fastest way to reach others.
secondly
, newer methods are very
secured
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, with their authentication procedures, these platforms
are providing
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 the
heighest
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highest
 level of security to the confidential information that we are exchanging with others.
Furthermore
, with
these kind
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 of techniques, one does not need to wait
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 or
worried
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 whether there is any information loss or stolen in the exchange process.
On the other hand
, choosing a letter for the communicational purpose
,
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 may take longer periods to reach
to
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the receiver,
due to
this
, sometimes the event may be done even before the receiver receives the letter.
For example
,
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 years back I wrote a letter to my friend about attending
to
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a seminar that should be held in the coming month, By the time my friend read it, the tickets to the seminar
are
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 already sold,
because
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 of
this
 we both missed the most important seminar which might be very helpful for our course work.
To conclude
, using modern
communications
instead
 of writing letters, information exchange is very reliable, provided you should be very careful in
whome
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whom
who
your
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 are sending it.
The academic
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 institutions should
tech
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teach
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the
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students
on using
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 these in an efficient way.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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