The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007.

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007.
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This
line graph provides information about the rate of university certificates for different genders in Canada during the period from 1992 to 2007.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the highest digit of student certificates were in 2007,
whereas
the number of
graduates
in 1992 was the lowest. It can be deduced from the line graph that university
graduates
increased slightly from 70,000 in 1992 to around 60
thousand
in 1995. If we compare the digits of boys and girls, we notice that females were the highest,
while
males were the lowest.
For instance
, in 2007, male students graduated approximately 90
thousand
,
however
, the number of females was just under 150
thousand
in the following years. it is interesting to notice that the digit of
graduates
fell slowly in 1995.
For example
, it was 105
thousand
in 1995
then
became under 80,000 in 1999 for male
graduates
. In conclusion, female
graduates
were the highest, but the lowest digit of
graduates
were males.
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