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You have heard that a developer plans to build a shopping centre near your home. • say how you heard about the plan • explain how you feel it • ask for more information about it

#developer #plans #centre #home #plan #information
Dear Sir, The reason why I am addressing
this
 letter is that I heard about the plan to build a new shopping centre which want to know more information about it. I have heard about the plan from your interview which you gave
last
 Sunday on the TV.
Moreover
, many people
known
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know
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 about
this
 chopping centre. I was very delighted after I heard about the new building. As there is one supermarket in our street. Even worse, it
has
Verb problem
does
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 not
many
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have many
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 quality products. Other supermarkets are very long from our neighbourhood.
Moreover
, it will provide many employment opportunities to the people
which
Correct pronoun usage
who
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they
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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don't go to other areas in search of jobs. I would be interested to find more information about the new shopping centre which want to know all
facilities
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the facilities
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such
 as
car
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a car
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 park, playground and others.
Therefore
,
it
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there
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 should be many products for purchasing. I hope that you will answer soon and will introduce other opportunities about it which I
unknown
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am unknown
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. Best regards, Jasmina Xudoyberdiyev.
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structure
Ensure your essay is well-structured, including a clear introduction that states the purpose of the letter, a body that elaborates on the points mentioned, and a concise conclusion that summarizes the letter or reiterates the request.
coherence
Try to maintain coherence by using linking words ('Furthermore', 'Additionally', 'Moreover', etc.) and paragraphs to organize your ideas clearly.
task response
To fully achieve the task, provide more detailed responses to the given bullet points. For example, explain in more depth how you heard about the plan, how it impacts you personally, and ask specific questions about the shopping center.
detailing
Include specific examples or scenarios to strengthen your main points. This will make your argument more convincing and your request for information more precise.
accuracy
Review grammar and spelling to ensure correctness throughout the letter. Minor errors can distract from your message and decrease the overall impression of your writing.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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