Some companies sponsor sports and sports stars as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Around the world, advertisement endorsement business
marketting
of brands and their products.
Many Correct your spelling
marketing
associations
sponsorship Change noun form
association's
associations'
to
Change preposition
of
sport
teams and their Change the noun form
sports
celeberities
to gain fame and popularity among Correct your spelling
celebrities
target
population is considered beneficial by some individuals. Correct article usage
the target
Whereas
many others are opposed to this
notion. In forthecoming
Correct word choice
the coming
paragraphs
I will elucidate both perspectives in detailAdd a comma
paragraphs,
,
and will throw my assertion with some Remove the comma
apply
stand out
examples.
First and foremost, there are innumerable pros for organizations who are using diverse marketing strategies Add a hyphen
stand-out
such
as making a
popular Correct article usage
apply
players
and different sports team
a part of their promotions. To be Fix the agreement mistake
teams
a
more precise, if any brand or brand Correct article usage
apply
product
is commercialise
Change the verb form
is commercialised
with
Change preposition
by
renowned
athletic team or team player, Add an article
a renowned
consequently
, it draws significant
impact on laymen, and they will be intended to buy that item or Correct article usage
a significant
product
of specific
brand because Correct article usage
a specific
famous
personality was Correct article usage
the famous
wearing
. A standout example is here, redbull drink became common among youngsters after watching social media ads, which showed Correct pronoun usage
wearing it
prediction
of Fix the agreement mistake
predictions
atheletic
Correct your spelling
athletic
players
that this
soft drink keeps them energetic and agile all day long while
they play. To
the Change preposition
From
stars
and Change noun form
star's
stars'
sport
Change the noun form
sports
groups
perspective, by the Change noun form
groups'
group's
companiese
Correct your spelling
companies
company's
support
they Add a comma
support,
also
get fimilarity
in Correct your spelling
familiarity
similarity
audience
.
Add an article
the audience
On the other hand
, there are some cons, which are faced by sponsord
associations as they use Correct your spelling
sponsor
sport
teams and popular Change the noun form
sports
players
for advertisement. They have to pay immassive
Correct your spelling
massive
amonts
of money Correct your spelling
amounts
amount
then
successful teams and celeberities
agree with them to be a part of their advertisements. Correct your spelling
celebrities
Moreover
, to enhance the sale of products they both sponsord
Correct your spelling
sponsored
companiese
and Correct your spelling
companies
players
forget
Fix the infinitive
to forget
the
people's health. Correct article usage
apply
For example
, pepsico
company billboards and commercials during cricket matches put on great Correct your spelling
PepsiCo
Pepsico
emphasize
on community Replace the word
emphasis
memebers
by using sportsman in their ads even though we know Correct your spelling
members
pepsi
Change the capitalization
Pepsi
drink
have hazardous effects on our health. Fix the agreement mistake
drinks
This
is completely unethical .
To conclude
, sponsord
organizations should advertise any Correct your spelling
sponsor
product
with great conscientious
. In my assertion merits of up above mentioned statements Replace the word
conscience
outweighted
the demerits. Correct your spelling
outweigh
Therefore
, it is a
best way to build insight regarding any Change the article
the
brnad
and Correct your spelling
brand
product
among target
population.Add an article
the target
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