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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map illustrates two proposed sites
of
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 the new supermarket in Garlsdon.
Overall
Linking Words
, the
site1
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site
 is out of town
while
Linking Words
 S2 is into the Garlsdon.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • map
  • town
  • supermarket
  • site
  • overview
  • possible
  • transportation
  • access
  • surrounding
  • facilities
  • population
  • density
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