The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.
the diagram illustrates how many
inquiries
that
the tourist information office in one city received over 6 months in 2011.
Correct word choice
apply
Overall
, there was a dramatic increase in the number
of inquiries
received by one corporate in person and by telephone, with the in-person method witnessing the most significant rise. While
a drop was seen in sending inquiries
by letter or email, in addition
, this
method was the lowest procedure from March
onward.
The number
of inquiries
that the tourist information office received in in-person started at 400 in January, then
it went up to 800 inquiries
in March
. While
by telephone was seen a slight decrease in February, after which it experienced a fair growth to 1000 ones in march
. Conversely
, under 800 inquiries
from the beginning went down to around 700 in the same period.
From March
to June, the number
of inquiries
received in person continued to soar up to 2000 in the latter of
month. Change preposition
apply
similarly
, the method by telephone leveled
off from Change the spelling
levelled
March
to April and then
captured an increase to 1600 in Jun. By contrast
, the last
one kept going down to under 400 in May and then
hovering at that number
till June.Submitted by nguyenhuyhoa1506 on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words inquiries, number, march with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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