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Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people say that it is too late to do something while others think that actions can be taken to improve the situation. Discuss both sides of the view and give your opinion.

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There is an intense debate about what is the best way for children to grow their brains, is by reading a book from stories, watching TV or playing games. Reading books are a boring way to educate kids and a lot of children lack interest in
this
 field. In opposite, playing video games and watching TV are more attractive to pupils than traditional media. So l totally disagree with the first view, and even these books we can present
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 to children through recent methods
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structure
Ensure that your essay has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Your current structure lacks a defined conclusion which is essential for completing your argument.
logical flow
Work on developing a logical flow between ideas. Consider using transition words to help connect your points more coherently.
task response
Fully respond to all parts of the task. It appears that there was a misunderstanding of the given topic leading to an off-topic response. Double-check to ensure you're addressing the given prompt accurately.
content development
To improve your task achievement score, provide balanced coverage of all views mentioned in the prompt before giving your opinion. Back up your points with specific examples or evidence.
coherence
Improve your coherence by enhancing the connectivity between your ideas. Each paragraph should clearly present and support a single main idea.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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