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On a recent holiday you lost a necessary item. Fortunately you have travel insurance to cover the cost of anything lost

#holiday #item #travel #insurance #cost
Dear Madam I am writing regarding that I
have
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recently lost my passport when I was staying
London's
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 hotel
in
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 my holiday trip.
Firstly
, my passport is covered
pink
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 leather. And, it has lots of shiny
and
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little stones. Unfortunately, I can not remember where I lost it. I think
,
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 I have lost it in the hotel. Because
of
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I had not taken it during
walk
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 the city. So, it is in my room
which
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 I have been living
only
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 one week. To resolve the problem, I would appreciate it if you could as soon as find. Because I really need it for back to
the
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my country. I look forward to hearing from you.
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Your
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 faithfully, Zuhra
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coherence cohesion
Use clear paragraphing to organise your letter. Each paragraph should cover a separate main point or idea.
coherence cohesion
Start with a brief introduction explaining the purpose of your letter, and end with a conclusion that summarizes your request or the outcome you desire.
coherence cohesion
Support your main points with specific details or examples to make your request more compelling.
task achievement
Ensure that you fully address the task by including all necessary information requested in the prompt, such as details about the item lost, where and how it happened, and what action you want to be taken.
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Use clearer and more comprehensive sentences to convey your ideas effectively. Avoid ambiguity and ensure your sentences are well-constructed and easy to follow.
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To make your letter more persuasive and relevant, include specific examples or situations to illustrate your points.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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