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Band 2.5

governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. to what extend do you agree?

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Introduction
People argued
about
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that
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 governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. I
am strongly agree
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 with that because it going to help the environment by reducing
cars
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 number and it
also
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 much faster than the traditional ways.
Body paragraph 1
It is very
obvous
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obvious
 that
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cars
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 gases are very harmful
for
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to
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 the environment. there is a
servay
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survey
 showed that
evry
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every
 house at least has
a
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apply
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two
cars
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 for personal use,
while
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,
useing
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using
 trans
are
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 less common.
Recent
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 study found that the amount of gas that ten
cars
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 produce
it
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is
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 the same for one
tran
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train
.
Emagine
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 how
meny
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many
cars
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 are in your area
?
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Body paragraph 2
Which is faster trans or
veicals
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vehicle
vehicles
?.
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Acording
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According
 to
phycis
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 the velocity
to
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of
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 a
tran
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train
in
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is
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 four times
than
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that
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 car
therefore
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 , taking the
tran
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train
are
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is
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 going to save you a lot of time.
Nowdays
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 we live in
speed
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a speed
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countray
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country
 the minutes are making
huge
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 differents.
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, a local
servay
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service
 in the USA found out
thar
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that
 more than 22% of employers are
geting fierd
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getting fired
duo
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due
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 to their late.
Conclusion
In
conclesion
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conclusion
,
government
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the government
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 should enhance railways to help the
enviornment
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environment
 and
encaroug
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uncaring
citizn
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citizen
citizens
 to use trans for
exampale
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example
 and that will help
thim
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them
 arrive early.

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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
Use concrete examples to support your assertions. While you mention surveys and studies, providing specific data or findings will make your argument stronger.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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