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In some place old age is valuable, while in other cultures youth is considered ,ore important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#place #age #cultures #youth #ore
While
 some people argue that elderly persons are more important, others believe that
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 impact is highly valuable.
This
 essay will discuss both views and give some reasons. There is no denying
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why seniors are considered golden because they are the books that contain our cultural background, they can be the best source to make an angel familiar with the style. his custom.
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, in Vietnam, when working parents often prefer to let their children stay with grandparents
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 so that they can learn good moral values and know about their traditions.
Furthermore
, the heads of the family are respected for their wisdom, which has come to them through various life experiences.
On the other hand
, if young people only follow the experiences of their older counterparts, they will not be creating anything new or revolutionary. The new generation brings energy, creativity and dynamism to any situation and they
also
 have the ability to observe, change and succeed in areas that their previous generations could not. So, the situation is not black and white, it is grey and the youth of any generation can
also
 bring seismic changes across all domains of life.
To conclude
,
although
 people still have many different conceptions.
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, I think each part has a
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 rate and independent role, so both deserve respect in society.
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Try to develop your arguments more thoroughly by expanding on the ideas provided. While you provided arguments for both views and your opinion, deeper analysis and more specific examples could enhance clarity and persuasiveness.
coherence and cohesion
Focus on more varied sentence structures and transitions between paragraphs to strengthen the essay's flow. While you have a decent structure, incorporating more complex sentences and thought transitions can make your essay more cohesive and engaging.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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