Some people think every human being can create artworks (e.g. painting), while others think only the people born with the ability can do that. Discuss both views and give your opinion.（2015/10/31亚太）
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a hard
consensus
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a consensus
whether
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on whether
people
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.It is important to explore both Fix the agreement mistake
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the
sides of the argument to gain a comprehensive understanding. Correct article usage
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This
essay will discuss both the point of views
followed by my opinion on the same.
Supporters of the earlier opinion argue that any skill can be acquired with the help of excellent teaching and Fix the agreement mistake
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lot
of practice. It meansCorrect article usage
a lot
,
one can acquire Remove the comma
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theroratical
perspectives of the artwork from an experienced mentor; Correct your spelling
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However
, this
will not be enough to create a masterpiece of art
. A good art
requires not only enough knowledge but also
years of practice. For instance
, watching 100 hours of videos on youtube
regarding drawing will not teach you to draw a circle without Correct your spelling
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help
of any instrument. Only exercising it multiple times can lead to perfection. Add an article
the help
Furthermore
, various artists are providing intense trainings
to youngsters about Change the wording
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pieces of training
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, but Change the wording
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pieces of training
also
provides
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provide
platform
where students can showcase their capabilities to the larger crowd through exhibitions,etc. Add an article
a platform
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helps rising artists to gain confidence and get critical feedback from the consumer itself.
Nevertheless
, despite the above arguments, people
with god gifted
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god-gifted
supersudes
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the
others in most Correct article usage
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of
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the
cases. They achieve the level of expertise in Correct article usage
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art
way before the people
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possess
such
quality by birth. This
is because, they do not start with Zero, their base is already formed. They just need to work on their weaknessess
and gain expertise in the field in which Correct your spelling
weaknesses
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the beginer
beginer
stage. Correct your spelling
beginner
Moreover
, people
with born talents are more likely to start working on them way earlier than others and they might also
get expert guidance easily if the particular skill is inherited from a family member.
After considering both sides of thr
argument, I partially agree with the first side. I find the argument in Correct your spelling
the
favor
of the Change the spelling
favour
people
who believe that every one
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art
. While
there are some areas where people
with god gifted
talent supersede the Add a hyphen
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once
with no Correct your spelling
ones
such
gifted talent; However
, a person can achieve the
expertise in Correct article usage
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an
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art
and create a perfect painting through tremendous hard work and unending practice.
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skills through perseverance and dedication.Add a hyphen
god-gifted
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