Some people think every human being can create artworks (e.g. painting), while others think only the people born with the ability can do that. Discuss both views and give your opinion.（2015/10/31亚太）

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time reaching

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creating an artwork can be done by all individuals or it can only be achieved by

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gifted

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.It is important to explore both

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sides of the argument to gain a comprehensive understanding.

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followed by my opinion on the same. Supporters of the earlier opinion argue that any skill can be acquired with the help of excellent teaching and

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of practice. It means

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one can acquire

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will not be enough to create a masterpiece of

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. A good

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requires not only enough knowledge but

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years of practice.

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, watching 100 hours of videos on

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of any instrument. Only exercising it multiple times can lead to perfection.

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to youngsters about

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and related areas. They are not just limited to

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platform

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where students can showcase their capabilities to the larger crowd through exhibitions,etc.

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helps rising artists to gain confidence and get critical feedback from the consumer itself.

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, despite the above arguments,

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cases. They achieve the level of expertise in

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way before the

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quality by birth.

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is because, they do not start with Zero, their base is already formed. They just need to work on their

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are already above

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people

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with born talents are more likely to start working on them way earlier than others and they might

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get expert guidance easily if the particular skill is inherited from a family member. After considering both sides of

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argument, I partially agree with the first side. I find the argument in

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of the

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who believe that

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can create

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and create a perfect painting through tremendous hard work and unending practice. To recapitulate, not everyone can create succeed in creating a masterpiece of

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. But someone who is not born with

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skills through perseverance and dedication.

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Logical structure

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