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Typically there is trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. however, at best these methods are ineffective and at worst they may be dangerous. To what extent do you agree to this statement.

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There is an undeniable fact that consuming
diverse
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a diverse
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 range of
medicine
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medicines
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 these days experiencing upward inclination,
while
 it is believed that they are either harmful or unproductive.
This
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that
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why using different
medicine
are
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 totally useless or hazardous. On
one
 hand, some believe that utilizing miscellaneous medicines not only
do
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does
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 not pose any threats to
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the consumer
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consumer
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consumers
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 but
also
it
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helps patients to heal
in
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 most occasions. They think people can alter the type of
medicine
 being used, based on their illnesses to obtain more effective results and to see
weather
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whether
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 the other type leads to better
outcome
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outcomes
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.
For instance
. There has been enough evidences of herbal medicines which is prescribed nowadays that shows enhanced
result
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results
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 that could been
otherwise
 if they had not consumed them.
Therefore
, they strongly trust in them and make use of them.
On the other hand
,
due to
 some negative influence of
such
 prescriptions ,others suppose that not using of right choice of
medicine
 by
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the public
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 directly
impress
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impairs
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 their health and in some special cases
pave
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paves
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 the way for unpredicted and unknown deaths among people which is inevitable in majority of the cases.
For example
, no
one
 can deny that ordinary people can not diagnose the cause of illness and may use exactly
wrong
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the wrong
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medicine
instead
 of
prescribed
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the prescribed
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one
; or even worse
to
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use some type of
medicine
 without consulting with
physician
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a physician
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. Ultimately ,
risk
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the risk
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 of using alternative
medicine
outweigh
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outweighs
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 the possible health to be provided. In conclusion,
this
 essay
argued
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that
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why the speculation of using substitute
medicine
 can not be effective
along with
potential
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the potential
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of
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dangers which are somehow hidden from our sight. I strongly believe that
one
 must not take
medicine
 in that the result of using remains obscured unless there is an approval of expertise in
this
 regard.
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