Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. What are the reason for this, and suggest some solutions. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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It has been acknowledged that violence and offence are drastically escalating among
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the younger
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generation in urban areas throughout the world.
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and insufficient
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and fines for
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committed
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crime
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.
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two
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such
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as strict
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and regulations
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some family restrictions. Majority of the
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and governments are not putting forward strict
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either at home as a small family or in
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scale. There may be considerations from
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and governments toward
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and citizens since they do not intend to intervene in their affairs in order to provide freedom for family members and
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may think that if they have limited
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they would not have gained enough self-confidence in their life and
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gradually leads to potential opportunities to commit crimes.
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evidences
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that
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of
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to violence in
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both factors
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from inadequate regulations in communities. To overcome
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flaw, strict
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can be introduced both for younger
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by
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and city dwellers by
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. The more discipline
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regulated in
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the better obedience will be conducted by people.
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, these
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can be set upon
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in
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to some extent. There
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evidences
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low
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a low
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rate of
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in countries with
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an adequate
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set of laws. Even some
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high obedience
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when regulations exist at home. All in all,
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play
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a preventive action in emerging violence and
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. In summary,
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about main reasons
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in
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including
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the lack
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of
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a set
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of
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both in
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and
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and
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provide
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solutions
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as more restrictions either at home by
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or in
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by
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the government
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. In my opinion, if someone or a government want to control the people, they should set strict
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first before any other disciplinary action has been taken.
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