Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. What are the reason for this, and suggest some solutions. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.
It has been acknowledged that violence and offence are drastically escalating among
younger
generation in urban areas throughout the world. Add an article
the younger
This
essay will discuss two related reasons including lack of control by parents
and insufficient rules
and fines for whom
committed Correct pronoun usage
those who
crime
. Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
Moreover
, this
essay will also
suggests
two Change the verb form
suggest
solution
Change to a plural noun
solutions
such
as strict rules
and regulations along with
some family restrictions.
Majority of the families
and governments are not putting forward strict rules
either at home as a small family or in society
in
Change preposition
on
big
scale. There may be considerations from Correct article usage
a big
parents
and governments toward children
and citizens since they do not intend to intervene in their affairs in order to provide freedom for family members and society
. For instance
, families
may think that if they have limited children
they would not have gained enough self-confidence in their life and this
gradually leads to potential opportunities to commit crimes. Also
there Add a comma
Also,
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
evidences
that Change the wording
evidence
pieces of evidence
shreds of evidence
lack
of Correct article usage
a lack
rules
leaded
to violence in Correct your spelling
led
society
. Overall
both factors derives
from inadequate regulations in communities.
To overcome Change the verb form
derive
this
flaw, strict rules
can be introduced both for younger children
by parents
and city dwellers by government
. The more discipline Correct article usage
the government
are
regulated in Change the verb form
is
society
the better obedience will be conducted by people. Likewise
, these rules
can be set upon children
in families
to some extent. There are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
evidences
Change the wording
evidence
pieces of evidence
shreds of evidence
show
Correct pronoun usage
that show
low
rate of Add an article
a low
crime
committing
in countries with Wrong verb form
committed
adequate
set of laws. Even some Add an article
an adequate
parents
repot
high obedience Correct your spelling
report
level
when regulations exist at home. All in all, Fix the agreement mistake
levels
rules
play as
a preventive action in emerging violence and Change preposition
apply
crime
.
In summary, this
essay argued
about main reasons Wrong verb form
argues
of growing
in Verb problem
for the growth
crime
including lack
of Correct article usage
the lack
set
of Add an article
a set
rules
both in families
and society
and also
provide
solutions Correct subject-verb agreement
provides
such
as more restrictions either at home by parents
or in society
by government
. In my opinion, if someone or a government want to control the people, they should set strict Correct article usage
the government
rules
first before any other disciplinary action has been taken.Submitted by keyhan454 on
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