The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
The diagram illustrates the making procedure of
sugar
in industries using Use synonyms
sugar
cane.
Use synonyms
Overall
, as per the data the manufacturing process includes 7 major steps right from growing the Linking Words
sugar
cane to extracting Use synonyms
sugar
USE SYNONYMS
carbohydrate
It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.
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As shown in the illustration, Use synonyms
sugar
canes are farmed Use synonyms
initially
. They are completely grown after twelve to eighteen months. Later they are harvested in two methods either by machines or manually using sickles. Linking Words
Thirdly
, it is observed that Linking Words
sugar
canes undergo a process called crushing where the Use synonyms
juice
is extracted from the canes through a machine.
In the fourth stage, the extracted Use synonyms
juice
undergoes purification through a filter made up of limestone. In the next step, the purified Use synonyms
juice
is poured into an evaporator. Here, the Use synonyms
juice
is boiled with the help of heat and Use synonyms
then
converted to syrup. In the sixth level, the formed syrup is sent into a circular centrifuge where Linking Words
sugar
crystals are extracted from it. Use synonyms
According to
the picture, the Linking Words
sugar
is formed by drying and cooling in large buckets Use synonyms
finally
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