Some people believe that it is better to get advice from old people compared to young people. Do you agree or disagree with this statement.
It is said
some
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by some
people
that it is more beneficial to get advice
from elderly individuals than youngers.While
there are
some truth to Change the verb form
is
this
belief,I would partly agree with this
point of view for some sound reasons.
From one perspective, old people
provide valuable advice
than you here such
as different situations like your behavior in society .And respect our culture also
following our national trandions
.Correct your spelling
traditions
Moreover
, they crucial role during
our Change preposition
in
grow
up.To explain, elderly Change the form of the verb
growing
people
well
known in my country as Add a missing verb
are well
leader
for Fix the agreement mistake
leaders
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the young
young
generations.Correct word choice
younger
For example
, every uzbek
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Uzbek
families
ask Change to a singular noun
family
advice
elder
family Change preposition
from elder
member
like grandfather or Change the noun form
members
grandmather
before Correct your spelling
grandmother
grandfather
begin
work and always Change the verb form
beginning
follow
them.Correct subject-verb agreement
follows
Therefore
,ask
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asking
advice
from elderly individuals important
for youth.
From Add a missing verb
is important
other perspective
, Change the wording
another perspective
other perspectives
olders
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older
effect
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affect
advice
certain
aspects of life but you Change preposition
on certain
gets
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get
give
wide-range of ways.Wrong verb form
given
That is
in the
modern life more Correct article usage
apply
yung
Correct your spelling
young
people
traveling
different countries for studying or work.As Change the spelling
travelling
consequence
,Correct article usage
a consequence
boaren
they horizons enriching experiences and get helpful information so they offer suggestions Verb problem
apply
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for your
your
career or financial situations.Correct pronoun usage
their
For instance
, according to
survey
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a survey
nowadays
more youngers take Add a comma
nowadays,
advice
from close friends choose work or financial problems.Besides
education systems and strat
their own business.
In conclusion,old age humans suggest cultural and traditional Correct your spelling
start
advices
. Change the wording
advice
pieces of advice
bits of advice
However
,youngers
provide information about our job prospects and other ways Correct your spelling
youngsters
life
.Change preposition
of life
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