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The graph gives information about the percentage of the population if four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020 with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph gives information about the percentage of the population if four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020 with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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The line graph illustrates the proportion of
people
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 in
cities
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 of the
Philippines
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,
Malaysia
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, Thailand and Indonesia between 1970 and 2020 with future predictions including 2030 and 2040 respectively.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
population
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 of all four Asian countries increased significantly and
Malaysia
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 stood out having the highest proportion of the
population
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.
This
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 pattern will likely continue into the future. In 1970,
Malaysia
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 and the
Philippines
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 had the highest percentage of the
population
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 living in
cities
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, constituting approximately 30% and 31% respectively.
However
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, it is predicted that by 2030, the proportion of city dwellers in
Malaysia
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 will be around 78%, which is expected to increase slightly in the next 10 years, making approx. 80% of
population
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.
Furthermore
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, in 1990, the volume of
Philippines
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 living in
cities
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 was around 45% which decreased
further
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 in the next 20 years, after 2010, the figure increased slightly, and it is expected that around 50% of
people
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 will reside in the
Philippines
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cities
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 by 2040.
However
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, in 1970, Thailand and Indonesia city residents had the lowest percentage of the
population
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, constituting approximately 14% and 18% respectively.
According to
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 future predictions, Indonesia will become the second highest populated country, around 55% of
people
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 will be residing in
cities
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 by 2040,
while
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 Thailand
also
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 experience a notable surge and is predicted to have 39% of
people
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 living in
cities
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cities, philippines, malaysia, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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