the pie charts below show enrollment in different fields of study at a particular university.

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The charts compare the proportions related to students enrolling in various fields of study by gender.

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, of the two charts,

education

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has the highest percentage among women. After that Engineering and

humanities

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are second and third respectively. Engineering has the highest popularity among men.

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Humanities

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has the least share in comparison with women, which is the second most popular field.

Education

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has the highest popularity among women with 35%.

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Humanities

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and Engineering are

also

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more popular, respectively, the former with 30% and the latter with 20%.

whereas

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, the lowest share belongs to Social Scientists with 15%. Coming to details, Engineering has the most salient proportion in enrollment among men with 35% in comparison with other fields.

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Humanities

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is the lowest field among men (15%), the two remained fields(Social Sciences,

Education

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) have considerable rates. In descending order,

Education

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and Social Sciences account for 20 and 25

percent

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per cent

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of male students respectively.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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the pie charts below show enrollment in different fields of study at a particular university.

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative developement?

local culture is badly influence by tourist,do you agree or disagree.

some people believe that children should study all subjects at school, while others think they should only study subjects they are good at or find interesting .discuss both views and give your opinion.

You missed a flight due to a problem at the airport. Write a letter to the airline. In your letter •Describe what happened that caused you to miss the flight •Explain how missing your flight affected you •Make it clear what you would like the airline to do.