The majority of television news being reported is bad news: wars, famines, accidents and crime. Some people think that television news should be a mixture of good and bad news. Choose whether you agree or disagree with this statement and discuss why you chose that position. Support your point of view with details from your own experiences, observations or reading.

The
news
headlines presented on television primarily deal with crime and natural
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.
However
, there is a
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controversy
regarding whether the
news
should include a mixture of both positive and negative topics.
This
essay will argue that the incorporation of positive topic
news
should be included in the broadcast. First of all, the main reason to include positive information is because the view rate of the
news
is
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likely
going to be increased.
This
is because the viewers mostly seek light and
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entertaining
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topics that do not burden them with heavy information.
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the viewers will more
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likely
accept watching a combination of both light and heavy
news
,
instead
of full negative and criminal,
for example
,
news
.
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, it has been already shown
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the newspapers that including an article about gossip or other
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interesting
topics, can help
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increase
the view rates significantly and
this
should
also
be translated the television.
Additionally
, by including a set of different
news
it is likely to reach different age brackets,
instead
of just targeting the same group of people.
This
is because younger generations do not want to watch gloomy
news
but they
also
want to have
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Task Achievement
Fully develop your argument with relevant examples. Your essay touches on important points but does not elaborate thoroughly on any. Include more detailed examples from real life, observations, or reading to support your points.
Task Achievement
Your essay lacks a clear conclusion. Remember to summarize your key points and restate your position clearly in the conclusion to make your essay more impactful.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that your essay flows logically from one paragraph to the next. Use transitional phrases to connect ideas and paragraphs. This will help your reader follow your argument more easily.
Coherence and Cohesion
Pay attention to spelling and grammar. Errors such as 'entrateining', 'likley', and 'incxrcease' detract from the credibility of your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, clearly outline your essay structure in the introduction and stick to this structure throughout. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea, with the first sentence indicating what that idea will be.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Balanced reporting
  • Mental well-being
  • Societal outlook
  • Media consumption
  • Inspirational stories
  • Journalistic integrity
  • Educational value
  • Overexposure
  • Desensitization
  • Fostering community
  • Shared achievements
  • Civic engagement
  • Positive reinforcement
  • Critical thinking
  • Selective reporting
  • Viewer discretion
  • Sensationalism
  • In-depth analysis
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