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The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph depicts the fluctuations in the
price
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for
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 bananas in
US
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the US
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 per kg in five
countries
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, over a
twelve year
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 period. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is noticeable that the highest
price
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 for
this
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 product corresponds to the country of
Japanm
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Japan
 with almost $2.5 dollars per kilogram,
wich
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which
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 witnessed a sudden
a
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apply
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plummet in the year
of
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2003, when the prices were almost
a
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half compared to 2004. Even though the dynamic for prices has been enormously inconstant in
countries
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 like Japan or France, the USA
price
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 on bananas
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plateud
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plated
 since 1998.
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,
to
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the prices in Germany which had a sudden surge in the year
of
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1999, reaching almost two dollars per kilogram, hovered around
this
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price
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 for the rest of the years shown.
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, the
price
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 for
such
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 fruit is certainly low in
countries
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 located in America, taking
for example
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 the US, with nearly one dollar and a half.
However
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,
this
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price
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 witnessed an increase in the European
countries
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 of France and Germany, where the
price
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 doubled.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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