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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1
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The line graph depicts the fluctuations in the
price
for
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 bananas in
US
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the US
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 per kg in five
countries
, over a
twelve year
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 period. From an
overall
 perspective, it is noticeable that the highest
price
 for
this
 product corresponds to the country of
Japanm
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Japan
 with almost $2.5 dollars per kilogram,
wich
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which
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 witnessed a sudden
a
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plummet in the year
of
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2003, when the prices were almost
a
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half compared to 2004. Even though the dynamic for prices has been enormously inconstant in
countries
 like Japan or France, the USA
price
 on bananas
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plateud
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plated
 since 1998.
In addition
,
to
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the prices in Germany which had a sudden surge in the year
of
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1999, reaching almost two dollars per kilogram, hovered around
this
price
 for the rest of the years shown.
Furthermore
, the
price
 for
such
 fruit is certainly low in
countries
 located in America, taking
for example
 the US, with nearly one dollar and a half.
However
,
this
price
 witnessed an increase in the European
countries
 of France and Germany, where the
price
 doubled.
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