You play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn't able to play with you at the weekend. You decide to write to him in hospital, telling him about the match. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, • tell him which team won • describe the conditions on the day • say how you felt about the match
Dear, John,
My purpose
of
writing Change preposition
in
this
letter is know
how my friend is doing and I inform him about the Change the verb form
to know
knowing
competition
How are you ? I'm sorry, I couldn't write to
you a letter soon enough, because I was very busy with competitions. The Change preposition
apply
competition
was very grueling
and exciting, but Change the spelling
gruelling
although
this
, our team
won and we had a victory. In
addition
the Add a comma
addition,
team
cohesion helped us to compete.
The weather was adverse weather the competition
. Weather
was cloudy, windy and very cold, but despite Correct article usage
The weather
this
a little uncompromising. In addition
, we experienced various mixed feelings. Such
as:
fear, excitement and disappointment. A Remove the comma
apply
member's
of Change noun form
member
the
our Remove the article
apply
team
a
leg Add a missing verb
had a
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
injured
, but Replace the word
injury
this
isn't very scary.
In my opinion, the competition
was very good, but maybe it was better,
when you participated too
We hope you return to the Remove the comma
apply
team
soon. After your recovery, I want to see you again in the team
. We respect you very much.
Best wishes,
GeorgeSubmitted by soglomovsarvar on
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Structure
Your letter effectively conveys the main points about the match, the conditions, and your feelings. Try to organize your ideas more coherently by dedicating separate paragraphs to each bullet point in the task.
Linking
Remember to use a variety of sentence structures and linking words to improve the flow of your writing. This can make your letter more engaging and easier to follow.
Accuracy
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and the use of appropriate vocabulary to precisely express your thoughts. This will enhance the clarity of your message.
Tone
Although you conveyed sympathy and shared news with your friend, injecting more personalized details and expressions of concern could make your letter more heartfelt.
Empathy
Your ability to convey encouragement and a desire for your friend's quick recovery adds a nice, personal touch to the letter.
Task Response
You've covered all the points required by the task, which shows good attention to task fulfilment.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite