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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very importatnt for people. Why misht this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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 of the world, purchasing a home is of great importance to folks in comparison to renting.
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 a matter of
value
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 of the bought houses
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 to living in
temporarily
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 places by paying
rent
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.
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 phenomenon could be
due to
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 the
socio-economical
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socioeconomic
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 status of those countries. It can be
deducted
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 that
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 can be a positive response to
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 financial situation of the environment, by owning a property and
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 lowering the cost of living in the long run,
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 improving the quality of life. The poor management of
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 status in a country could result in high inflation and highly
volitile
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volatile
 asset markets
that
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 owning a
house
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 would be
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the solution
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 to that problem.
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 in some 3rd world countries like
Iran
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Iran,
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 the cost of
rent
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 will rise dramatically from time to time as
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inflation grows.
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 owning a property
such
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 as a
house
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, could be a way to live more reliably rather than renting one. So we can see the
favor
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 of owning a living space rather than renting one because it would be an investment.
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 a different point of
view
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view,
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 we can see how acquiring a
house
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 would be better for the bigger picture.
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example
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 if you are to pay
rent
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 for 2000$ each month for about 5 years steadily will cost you more than to buy a
house
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 for 100,000$ in the first place, which we can see that
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 would be
more
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 financially reasonable course of action
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 to
rent
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 so it is a better choice to buy rather than to
rent
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 we can see why owning a living space could be more beneficial to some people compared to paying
rent
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. It is believed by
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economic
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 is better to be an owner than to be a tenant. The prediction would be that people tend to buy houses more in certain times and places because it is better suited for the occasion which is viewed as a positive outcome.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural Significance
  • Financial Investment
  • Heritage and Legacy
  • Equity
  • Return
  • Security
  • Permanence
  • Customize
  • Stability
  • Financial Burden
  • Socioeconomic Disparities
  • Marginalized
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