The graphs below give information about male and female prisoners in a European country between 1911 and 2001.

The graphs below give information about male and female prisoners in a European country between 1911 and 2001.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graphs below give information about male and female prisoners in a European country between 1911 and 2001.
The first line graph demonstrates data on the
number
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of women in prison, and the second line chart shows the male
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prisoners
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population
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in one European country from 1911 to 2001.
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, it can clearly be seen that over the given
period
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, the
number
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of women and men incarcerated witnessed a downward and upward trend, respectively.
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,
female
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the female
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prisoners
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population
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had the highest share,
whereas
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that of
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the male
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male
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was the least throughout the whole time frame. To being, the
number
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of women incarcerated about 3100, but over the following 30 years, their
number
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dropped dramatically to around 4000. From 1941 to 1971, the figure of
female
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females
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in jail increased relatively, and their
number
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reached its peak (1200 people) in 1961, after which the
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of them began to rise and
at the end
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of the given
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, it stood at nearly 1800 people. At the beginning of the
period
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, 1911, the proportion of male
prisoners
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was approximately 19000, and for the next
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decade,
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their
number
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remained stable. Despite a slight increase in
male
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the male
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prisoners
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population
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between 1921 and 1941, men incarcerated had
increased
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an increased
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trend, reaching 2000, in 1971. From 1971-1981, the
population
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of male in
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prison
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doubled (4700) and their
population
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slightly reached around,
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of the
period
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, prisoners, population, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • incarceration rates
  • imprisonment
  • fluctuations
  • notable patterns
  • steady increase/decrease
  • gender disparity
  • crime rates
  • justice system
  • reform policies
  • external factors
  • societal attitudes
  • legislation changes
  • offense types
  • prison population
  • early/mid/late 20th century
  • demographic trends
  • statistical analysis
  • criminal behavior
  • historical context
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