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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbian island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbian island between 2010 and 2017.
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The line chart illustrates the changes in the
number
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 of people who travelled to a particular Caribbean
island
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 from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, the total of travellers, including those staying on cruise ships and staying on the
island
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, increased from 1
million
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 to 3.5
million
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 in
this
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 period.
Moreover
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, it
had shown
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 a sharp growth
during
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from
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 2016 to 2017. First of all, there were merely 0.25
million
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 visitors staying on ships in 2010.
Subsequently
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,
this
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number
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 fluctuated in the next two years and
then
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 rose dramatically by 1.75
million
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 in the following periods. Notably, it has exceeded the
number
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 of visitors staying on the
island
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 since 2016.
In addition
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, the figure of how many people stayed on the
island
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 to visit the Caribbean
island
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 started to grow in 2011 and plateaued at 1.5
million
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 from 2013 to 2015.
This
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number
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 declined to approximately 1.25
million
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 in 2016
while
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 it ultimately recovered to 1.5
million
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 in 2017.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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