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The line graph and table show the average monthly temperatures and annual hours of sunshine in three major cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph and table show the average monthly temperatures and annual hours of sunshine in three major cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph and table draw the conclusion of a survey about the average monthly temperature change and the average amount of time at sunshine per
year
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 in three various areas: London, New
York
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, and
Sydney
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.
overall
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, all trends are rarely stable every
year
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.
Although
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, the lines illustrate sharp fluctuations New
York
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 had the most changes before it returned to approximately five as the same First data in January. In the first month, the data gives information on
Sydney
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 had the greatest temperature among other cities above 25 Degrees centigrade. London and New
York
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 had the lowest near 10 and under 5 degrees respectively.
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, both of them reached a peak in July. The significant increase was been almost thirty in New
York
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. In sharp contrast, it seems that
Sydney
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 had a sudden decline in July. All of them reverted to the first point in January. The range of hours in three urban, New
York
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 and
Sydney
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 had the most sun days each
year
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,
nevertheless
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, the number of hours in
Sydney
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 was more than in New
York
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 around 2500.
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, London had the least time per
year
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.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, york, sydney with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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