The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the
quanity
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number
of tourists
of
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Caribbean
island
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islands
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from 2010 to 2017,including two groups of visitors who chose to travel by cruise ships or stay on the
island
as well as
their total amount. Looking from an
overall
perspective,it is apparent that there was an increase of two kinds of visitors during the period(2010-2017),and the whole
gourp
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group
has
steabily
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steadily
grown up except
a
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temporary stay in 2015.Generally speaking,there were more people who
prefered
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preferred
ship tours
instead
of staying on the
island
before 2015,
after
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but after
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then
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that
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,
situation
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the situation
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has changed. In terms of cruise ships travelling,its data was 1
millions
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million
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higher than the other one and remained unchanged until 2011,
then
it
crimbed
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climbed
up by 1.5
millions
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million
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in the following two
years
and reached its peak in 2013.
Nevertheless
,it has stabilised at 1.5
millions
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in
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the
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after 4
years
except
a
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short
fell
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with fluctuation in 2016. As for people who want to spend their holidays on the
island
,the population
has
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slightly went up in 2010 but
immdiately
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immediately
declined.In the
years
since 2012,the number of them increased dramatically,growing from 0.5
millions
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million
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to 2
millions
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million
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,reaching its peak in 2017.It was worth mentioning that their data exceeded the other group of tourists,who
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had
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been beyond them for 5
years
before.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, millions, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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