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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the number of tourists to the Caribbean
island
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 from 2010 to 2017,including two groups of
visitors
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 who chose to travel by cruise ships or stay on the
island
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as well as
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 their total amount. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective,it is apparent that there was an increase of two kinds of
visitors
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 during the period(2010-2017),and the whole group has steadily grown except for a temporary stay in 2015.Generally speaking,there were more people who preferred ship tours
instead
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 of staying on the
island
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 before 2015,but after that,the situation has changed. In terms of cruise ships travelling,its data was 1
million
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 higher than the other one that a quarter of a
million
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visitors
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 wanted to stay on cruise ships,
while
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 another 750000
visitors
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 were staying on the
island
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.It remained unchanged until 2011,
then
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 it climbed up by 1.5
million
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 in the following two
years
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 and reached its peak in 2013.
Nevertheless
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,it stabilised at 1.5
million
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 in the following 4
years
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 except for a
short fall
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 of 250000
of
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people with fluctuation in 2016. As for people who want to spend their holidays on the
island
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,the population slightly increased by half of a
million
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 in 2010 but immediately declined and rose to 500000 at its zenith.In the
years
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 since 2012,the number of them increased dramatically,growing from 0.5
million
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 to 2
million
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,reaching its peak in 2017.It was worth mentioning that their data exceeded the other group of tourists,who had been beyond them for 5
years
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 before.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, visitors, million, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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