"Prevention is better than cure" Out of a country's health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventive measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
According to
, World
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the World
Health
Organization, health
is considered as physical, mental, and social wellbeing. Although
, in today’s world, there are many treatments for almost all the
illnesses, I believe prevention is better than cure. Correct article usage
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Therefore
, I completely agree to
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essay, I will discuss further
regarding my answer.
There are some diseases, which can not be cured once you get Rephrase
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it
, but those conditions can be prevented easily through some life modifications. Correct pronoun usage
them
For example
, non-communicable diseases such
as diabetes, hypertension, heart conditions and hypercholesterolemia can be prevented by healthy
diet. For a year, the government spend millions of dollars to treat patients with these illnesses. But if the government spend half of the money to increase awareness of the community about these conditions, in no time people will be healthy Add an article
a healthy
as well as
the
money will be saved.
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Furthermore
, in Sri Lanka, the most prevalent cancer among males is oral squamous cell carcinoma. The reason is betel chewing. Betel chewing has a cultural value. Because of that, the public does not consider it as
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,
patients with oral carcinoma undergo surgeries, there is a high chance of recurrences and Remove the comma
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spread
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the spread
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lungs
and other systems. Correct article usage
the lungs
Moreover
, the mental health
of the person who got the disease and the mental health
of the relatives should be considered. It will not be as same as it was before. Therefore
, even though, they undergo surgery, they will be living with fear about
recurrences and they will have to face Change preposition
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side
effects of the treatments. But the sad truth is thatCorrect article usage
the side
,
it could have been prevented easily with Remove the comma
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habit
intervention.
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To conclude
, in my perspective, it is better to prevent a disorder than curing
it and it will help the Wrong verb form
cure
health
of the public as well as
economy
of the country.Add an article
the economy
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