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The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projecyions for 2050.

The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projecyions for 2050.
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The four pie charts illustrate the proportion of the ages of the
population
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 in two countries namely Yemen
ans
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and
Itlay
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Italy
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 in two different periods 2000 and 2050.
An
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overall
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 perspective, the Yeman has the lower number of senior citizens in both these given
period
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.
In contrast
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, Italy has
minimum
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population
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in
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of
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 elder people. Yamen had
the
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just above half of the
population
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 which
age
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 is from 0 to 14
while
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 Itlay had only 14.3 per
cent
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 in 2000.
This
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 proportion will be decreased by 37% and 11.5% respectively in 2050.
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age
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group
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 of 15-59, in 2000
of
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apply
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Yemen had 46.3
percentage
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per cent
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whereas
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 it will increase by 11% in 2050.
On the contrary
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, in 2000, Italy had
this
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 same
ave
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age
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group
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 of
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population
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the population
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, which accounts for just above three-fifths
then
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this
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age
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group
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 will be decreased in 2050,
at
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to
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 11.3 per
cent
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. The
age
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group
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 of above sixty in Yamen, in 2000, just 3 per
cent
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 but Italy had just below a quarter
thereafter
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this
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age
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group
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 of people ratio will be raised significantly in 2050. Which accounts for 5.7% and 42.3 per
cent
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 respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, age, cent, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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