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With traffic jams and pollution increasing every year in big cities, some people say that public transport should be free in big cities to help reduce these problems which are caused by cars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, traffic jams and pollution are common occurrences in big cities, and they are increasing every year. Some argue that to reduce these problems public vehicles should be free which are caused by private cars
while
 others argue that the jams and pollution aren't caused by private cars.
However
, I side with those who believe public vehicles should be free to reduce traffic jams and pollution. I'll go ahead and explore my perspective and present my view on
this
 matter. By offering free public transportation, there exists the opportunity to mitigate urban congestion. There is a saying, "We cannot get the good news out of bad practice", which implies that we cannot expect the decongestion of cities by discouraging the use of public vehicles.
For instance
, In every city, traffic congestion is a common issue, particularly around 9:00 am. The implementation of free public transportation by the government could lead to significant decongestion in urban areas.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban congestion
  • pollution
  • public transport
  • incentive
  • behavioural change
  • implementation
  • alternative solutions
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • infrastructure
  • commuter
  • accessibility
  • efficiency
  • subsidize
  • carbon footprint
  • mitigate
  • feasibility
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