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You have just won two tickets to a concert and want to invite your friend to go with you.Write a letter to your friend.In this letter: give details about the consert describe how you won the tickets explain why you have chosen your friend to go with you .

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Dear Kendall, How have you been?I just got your letter I am feeling very elated to know that you are visiting Uzbekistan for 1 whole week .Your timing could not be better than that because I have recently won two tickets to the live
consert
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concert
which is taking place
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 Tashkent and
i
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 would be
plesed
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pleased
 if you could come with me. I am really excited to invite you with me .The
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concert
 will be held in Istiqlol Sanat Saroyi on
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 of
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 at 8 pm.
Although
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wouldnot
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would not
wouldn't
 even consider buying those tickets as they were high priced.Early morning I was watching
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a live
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 show and there was
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competiton
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competition
 organised
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 competitors had to guess celebrities based on their eyes .
Additionally
,I
have
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called them and
gave
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given
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 the right answers and they awarded me with these free
consert
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concert
concerts
 tickets. We have been
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 for almost 10 years now and I know that you have
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 interest in music.
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,I could not think of
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a better
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 person to go with.I would love that if you could come.Waiting for your reply. Regards Jasmina
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Task Response
To improve the task response, ensure all aspects of the task are fully addressed. While you've covered the concert details, how you won the tickets, and why you've chosen your friend, you could elaborate more on each point to create a richer narrative.
Coherence and Cohesion
Consider using a wider range of linking words and phrases to enhance the cohesion between sentences and paragraphs. This will make your letter flow more smoothly and feel more connected.
Language and Tone
Ensure consistency in spelling and punctuation. In informal letters like this, contractions (e.g., 'I'm' instead of 'I am') are acceptable and can make the tone more personal and friendly.
Greeting and Closing
Try to begin your letter with a more engaging greeting and end with a warmer closing to make the letter feel more personal and less formal. For example, starting with 'Dear [Friend's Name], It's been a while!' can create immediate warmth.
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