The chart below shows the percentage of female members of parliament in 5 European countries from 2000 to 2012

The chart below shows the percentage of female members of parliament in 5 European countries from 2000 to 2012
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The line graph illustrates the percentage of
women
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in
Parliament
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in the countries of Germany, Italy, France, The United Kingdom, and Belgium in 12 years from 2000 and continuing until 2012.
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, it is noticeable that the amount of female
parliament
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was much less in the UK and Belgium compared to the other three European countries in the first year,
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,
this
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number rose in the following years. With regard to the comparison between the five countries below, only 5% of British
women
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were interested in
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field in 2000,
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Germans were in first place in
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field with almost 35%. As moving on,
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, the percentage in the UK experienced a sharp growth and reached on fifth of the total number. Belgian
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,
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, started at 17% and rose steadily in
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period eventually reaching quite more than 20%. France in third place, started with a quarter of all the
women
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who participated in
parliament
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and continued its growth by more than 30% in 2012, compared to Italian females who started with the same percentage, but reached the maximum of 40%.
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, Germans started off strong by the amount of 34%, and had a slight growth to 37%. In conclusion, the amount of
parliament
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women
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was the lowest in the UK and highest in Germany in the first year,
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, as the plot unfolded, the Italians stepped on the highest level with 40% in 2012.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words women, parliament with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • parliament
  • gender equality
  • trends
  • percentage
  • significant progress
  • minimal progress
  • yearly analysis
  • country-specific
  • events
  • elections
  • policies
  • initiatives
  • speculating
  • predictive
  • representation
  • tracking
  • issues
  • addressing
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