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The graph below shows changes in global food and oil prices between 2000 and 2011.

The line graphs compare the
food
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 and
oil
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 prices globally over an 11-year
period
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 between 2000 and 2011.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 both lines follow a similar trend.
Also
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, the prices of
food
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 and
oil
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 experienced a significant rise with a strong correlation of 93.6% during the
period
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 shown. In 2000, the
index
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 of
food
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 prices was about 90 points, increasing gradually until 2002, and
then
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 dipped after almost 6 months, reaching its lowest value during the whole
period
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.
By contrast
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, the average
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 of
oil
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 all over the world was just under 30 dollars per barrel, doing the same as the
food
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 trend hitting a trough in 2002. Afterwards, it recovered, rising stably until 2007. In 2007, both line graphs started to rise rapidly, peaking in the middle of 2008 at roughly 230 points and 130 dollars per barrel for the global
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price
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index
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 and the average
price
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 of
oil
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, respectively.
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, the figures plummeted by almost 40% in the
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price
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index
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 and 60% in the average
oil
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price
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.
Finally
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, they both rose strikingly;
however
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, the trend for points of the
food
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price
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index
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 reached
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its
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 highest value over the whole
period
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words food, oil, period, index, price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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