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The graph illustrates how many tourists visited a particular Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017. On the whole, there was an increase in the number of visitors in the iland during the period. One of the features to note is that the total number of people visiting the iland increased throughout the period. More specifically, there were 1 million people in 2010, and then, rose to a staggering 3.5 million people by the end of the period in 2017. The second point to note is that visitors staying on cruise ships was also increasing. Looking more closely, the number of people fell slightly from 2011 at 0.5 million to around 0.25 million, but after that, increased to 2 million in 2017. Interestingly, the number of visitors staying on island had no changes from 2013 to 2017. Specifically, it rose from low of about 0.75 million in 2010 to 1.5 amillion in 2013,but from 2013 to 2017, the number was almost the same at 1.5 million.

The graph illustrates how many tourists visited a particular Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017. On the whole, there was an increase in the number of visitors in the iland during the period. One of the features to note is that the total number of people visiting the iland increased throughout the period. More specifically, there were 1 million people in 2010, and then, rose to a staggering 3.5 million people by the end of the period in 2017. The second point to note is that visitors staying on cruise ships was also increasing. Looking more closely, the number of people fell slightly from 2011 at 0.5 million to around 0.25 million, but after that, increased to 2 million in 2017. Interestingly, the number of visitors staying on island had no changes from 2013 to 2017. Specifically, it rose from low of about 0.75 million in 2010 to 1.5 amillion in 2013,but from 2013 to 2017, the number was almost the same at 1.5 million.
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The graph illustrates how many tourists visited a particular Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017. On the whole, there was an increase in the
number
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 of visitors in the iland during the period. One of the features to note is that the total
number
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 of
people
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 visiting the iland increased throughout the period. More specifically, there were 1
million
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people
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 in 2010, and
then
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, rose to a staggering 3.5
million
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people
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 by the end of the period in 2017. The second point to note is that visitors staying on cruise ships
was
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also
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 increasing. Looking more closely, the
number
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 of
people
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 fell slightly from 2011 at 0.5
million
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 to around 0.25
million
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, but after that, increased to 2
million
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 in 2017. Interestingly, the
number
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 of visitors staying on
island
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the island
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 had no changes from 2013 to 2017. Specifically, it rose from
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a
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low of about 0.75
million
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 in 2010 to 1.5
amillion
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million
 in 2013,but from 2013 to 2017, the
number
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 was almost the same at 1.5
million
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.
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