Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports faculties . Others , however say that this would have little effect on public health and other measures are required . Discuss both these views and give your own opinion .

The diagram shows male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010. In general, amount of men, going to gyms reduced and amount of women increased. Analysing the dependence of men, visiting the gym, by

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it can be seen, that increases and decreases are very sharp, the maximum was in 2005 and the minimum

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at 2010;

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maximum was in 1985. Some serious drop was between 1985 and 1995. Amount of women, going to gyms fluctuates from year to year

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but increases in general. Important information, that can be extracted from

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minimum and

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maximum

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somewhere nearly in 1995.

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, nearly 2005 a great

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growth of interest in

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can be observed

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(but not so big).

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trend in 1980-1985 was that memberships increased

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both genders and in 2005-2010 was that memberships decreased. The trends in both genders are quite similar except

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1985-2000 period.